The Dragons (ch.9)

Amber

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After that the wind blew the tree’s ashes away,revealing a green dragon egg.The egg started to crack and out came a very catlike head ,then a cat dragon came out and he was also wearing a necklace. All 3 necklaces started glowing and snapped together like magnets . That’s when Spacy and Drago knew that the cat dragon was their brother . The cat dragon said that his name was Amber . The necklaces came apart . Then Amber coughed and a lightning bolt came out and scorched the ground in front of him . Everyone was so surprised that they all literally jumped 2 meters into the air .

Boom! The planet of Amalthea shook violently as its moon exploded.Drago,Spacy, and Amber all saw the beam of light that came from the other end of the continent.Amalthea wasn’t a big planet, it was the size of Venus and had 19 continents.Amber got there first because he had the biggest wingspan of around 24 meters, fully three times his height and the other 2 had wingspans of 20 meters which are 2.5 times their height.It took him 75 minutes to get there and the others weren’t far behind. It was a sight to behold when they got there.There was a circle of metal encircling a tornado of all the known elements and 500 other particles.Standing in the middle of it was a dragon looking up into the sky muttering “I devote my life to the xenodragon king as long as the pillar from which I was born remains unbroken” over and over.

My Third Essay

Topic: Do you think that sending rockets to space is a waste of money?

 

Some people think that sending rockets into space is a waste of money. In this essay I will write about the reasons why I think that sending rockets is not a waste of money .

Firstly in the short term , rocket launches create lots of enthusiasm for STEM ( Science,Tech , Engineering , and Math ) fields . This enthusiasm makes more people want to go to universities . When people go into higher learning they get better jobs and therefore get more money . And once they get more money they can support their families better than if we just gave the rocket budget to them from the beginning .

In the long term the quality of life could get better because some of the technologies we use in the space industry can be used in regular life too . One of the examples are cordless drills which were developed by NASA for collecting moon samples . Cordless drills are good because they can be used any where and they don’t give you the risk of tripping over or tangling the wire .

Those are the reasons why I think that sending rockets is not a waste of money. I hope you agree with me and think that sending rockets to outer space is a worthwhile activity.

How Cat Kingdom Was Created (part 1)

I, the cat prince woke up in a gigantic catnip forest.The last thing I remembered was touching the green fire in the Holy Kitten’s temple. I saw 5 other cats from the kingdom around me , their names were Shiny,Sparky,Fluffy,Muffin and Abraham Jackson the third (AJ3 for short).And the catnip extended as far as the eye could see. However I did not see any way back to the kingdom . Suddenly With a poof the real Holy Kitten appeared in front of me. He said “ YOU MUST BUILD A NEW KINGDOM HERE!  ” and disappeared with another poof. I immediately told all of the other cats to gather some wood and when we had enough we built the first hut.

Holy Kitten appeared again and said “ FOR EVERY HUT YOU BUILD , I WILL BLESS YOUR KINGDOM WITH 2 NEW KITTENS  ” . Immediately after that Holy Kitten and the other 5 cats disappeared and in their place stood 2 kittens.I told them to start getting wood and when we had 25 logs we built a library!

My Second Essay

First Draft:

I think the internet is a very awesome invention!

My first reason is that it helps us to transfer information much faster. One example of this is that you don’t have to go to physical stores to shop anymore.Now with digital shops like Amazon in the rise probably in the near future no one has to go out of their house to buy stuff.Another example is Banking. In the olden days people had to carry all of their money in their wallets,but now people can deposit their money online and even use purely electronic currency like Bitcoin.

My second reason is that the internet gives us more options for entertainment. Before the internet kids only had 2 major sources for entertainment. Namely Books and TV.With the internet you could watch whatever whenever. Meaning that you can watch anything anytime.

Another advantage you get with the internet is Social Media. What I mean by that is if you have a pal on the other side of the world and you wanted to contact them without calling them , you can use services like Facebook to message them.

Those are the reasons why I think he internet is a very wonderful invention !

 

Second Draft:

Around 40 years ago almost nobody imagined that a thing known as the Internet would permeate most parts of life.Whereas in the modern age , life without the internet is almost unimaginable.I will be writing about my reasons for why I think the internet is awesome below.

My first reason is that it helps us to transfer information much faster. One example of this is that you don’t have to go to physical stores to shop anymore.Now with digital shops like Amazon on the rise probably in the near future no one has to go out of their house to buy stuff.Another example is Banking. In the olden days people had to go to a physical bank to do all of their banking.But now people can do most of their banking from their computer.

Secondly, the internet gives us more options for entertainment. Before the internet kids only had 2 major sources for entertainment, namely Books and TV.The downside of books are that you have to go to a library or a bookstore to get them and the downside of TV is that you can only watch what is on right now.But with the internet you could watch whatever whenever. Meaning that you can watch anything anytime.

Another advantage you get with the internet is Social Media. What I mean by that is if you have a pal on the other side of the world and you wanted to contact them immediately , you can use services like Facebook to message them.

The last thing that I am going to talk about is how the internet affects education.Before, students had to go to a school to take a course.With the internet anybody can learn any course from the comfort of their home with the help of video lessons.They can also rewind if they don’t understand a topic and ask online communities questions.

In the near future most scientists believe everything will be connected to the Internet. From your house keys to your curtains and from your car to your kitchen table, everything will be linked to this “Internet of Things”.The internet has had a big influence in our lives and will keep impacting us forever.

My First Essay

Topic:Can Textbooks teach us more life skills than fiction can?

 

My opinion is that textbooks can teach us more about life skills than fiction can. (the first paragraph can be more smooth and interesting, try harder next time)

In my opinion,fiction is about imaginary events, people, and things.While textbooks are like cookbooks,how-to books , and other learnng books in general. ( Not really consistent, when you talk about textbooks, you use examples not definitions like in fiction)

An example of fiction is How To Train Your Dragon. It is set on earth during the viking times and it features Dragons.An example of a textbook is Introduction To Number Theory which is a textbook that teaches you the fundamentals of number theory. (Very good example, also very nice to highlight book names, maybe try to elaborate more)

The reason why we learn from textbooks at school is because it teaches us the skills needed to get the job you want.But if we only learned from fiction we would only know how to defeat fictional bad guys like Sauron .But those kinds of people do not exist in the real world so that knowlege is kind of useless.(Who is Sauron?? try to be more specific, more details please 🙂

Those are the reasons why I think textbooks can teach us more life skills than fiction can. (extractly same as the first pharagraph)

Grader comments are in Green :

4.5/6

I think the essay is very well organized and clearly stated, the writer successfully used good examples to support his opinion, as well as good conparison between two subjects, however, the essay is little bit toooooooooooooo  skinny, how about  more explanations ,details and reference next time

I agree

-Ray (the writer)

The Dragons (ch.8)

Dracul

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A lime green egg encased in a pillar of stone exploded and 100 raw eggs splattered in a circle around it.A lime dragon with blue wings hopped out,his name was Dracul.Then he involuntarily uttered “Ngimemeza ibhola leqhwa”(‘I shout for a snowball”) and a one km big snowball fell on him,freezing his heart and making him evil.

 

2 years later he woke up in a hospital for newborns.he gathered up all his strength and said “Ngiyacela ukushayela izinyoka ezibulalayo ezivuthayo nge-asidi yokuphefumula nokuvutha amathanga omlilo we-titanium”(“I call for flying flaming death serpents with acid breath and glowing hot titanium knives”) to try and break out of the room.But since the room was reinforced with Angenakunqotshwaium(an invisible metal that you can only bend with Tree(3)(very big number) tons of force).The serpents exploded on impact and the daggars melted into globules of liquid titanium alloy.

 

8 years after that he went to the pillar where he as born,looked into the sun and shouted “ngiyamemeza inkosi yase-xenodragon” and a blinding beam of light 10cm wide blasted through to space.He was trying to summon the Zenodragon king in the heart of the sun which was the only thing big enough in the solar system.But then there was a solar eclipse so all of the energy went into the moon making it explode!

The Dragons (ch.7)

Hi Bro

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Drago Flew over the maze and saw a teleportation crystal in the center . He went down and when he touched it he found himself in front of a pretty dragon around his age. The other dragon also had a necklace and it looked like they fit together . Drago asked the other dragon if she could lend her necklace to him for a few seconds . She said yes and Drago tried to put the 2 necklaces together . It worked . The 2 necklaces together formed a jagged heart shape with a partially completed translation chart on the back . He gave her part of the necklace back to the girl dragon and suddenly the living pizza appeared in front of them . The Pizza said to Drago “ Drago , this is your sister Spacy ” and he said to Spacy “ Spacy , this is your brother Drago ” . Drago then asked Spacy to show him her attack and spacy breathed out an ice shard . Drago then breathed his fire on the ice and it turned into a purple blob . It was made of half fire and half ice . The blob hit a tree and the tree was simultaneously frozen and burning .